2017年7月20日木曜日

Venus Bay

Story
At last, Jake felt himself rising. But there was another problem-he wanted to take a breath. No, he told himself, and he tired not to think about it. It was a long time before Jake saw light coming down throught the water. He couldn't hold his breath any longer. His mouth opened and the water nushed inside.
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Dad had seen Holly waving. He swam in to shore with Jake. Holly rested for a while, then she slowly swam in, too. As she came out of the water, Holly heard Jake cought. "Is he all right?" She called to her father. "I think so, Dad said, but I'm calling for an ambulance.

They came to surf in two people, because they like it. Then he fell. He went to the rescue hastily. Though I called for help, there wasn't a person. Therefore I helped him alone. He would be scared. Help came, and he was saved. His action that I helped with was good. I will be nothing. His courage is great.I learned a lifesaving lecture at school,but I'm scared and can't do it if in situation. I want to become it like him. There is a good friend, and a saved friend is enviable. I intended to help a person if I was in situation from this book. ( 110 words )

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  1. Please be sure to reformat your quotation so that we can distinguish it from your own writing. And make sure that your own writing is actually by you, rather than computer translation.

    Holly heard Jake cought.
    Holly heard Jake cough.

    he tired not to think about it
    he tried not to think about it

    "Though I called for help, there wasn't a person. Therefore I helped him alone. He would be scared. Help came, and he was saved. His action that I helped with was good."

    I don't understand your involvement in this story. Is the book about you?

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